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Passage to Dala
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Francis
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14/12/2009 15:43:56
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Ciao Francis,
A project of singles (again ;o) ) Damn you're good at that. As pictures they are all good, 'Intermezzo' is great and 'cry freedom' is a nice touch. As a project i'm not feeling it. I don't think the diversity of the shots here (B&W, Color, black frame, etc..) is the problem for that, so it has to be something else.
1. Does the slideshow tell me a story of people take the ferry over the Yangon river? Absolutley not my friend :o) Yes the river is present in 5 of the 7 shots, so yes there is something about that river. And i know we can read your perfect notes to make the story complete, but to me the notes should complement the story that is told by the pictures and here i have the feeling it's the other way around. Remember we are on Photoholik, the photo's should do the talking the notes give us some additional information or nice anecdotes or heck even a nice lyric works fine sometimes.
2. It's a very chronological subject. Point A---- take the ferry---- Point B. And yet you try to mix things up Tarrantino style. I think this doesn't work with only 7 shots, it's more confusing than that it does the story justice.
3. Only 7 shots! Are you kidding? I'm sure you have more than 7 shots to tell this thing. Lets devide this thing up in 3 chapters again. point A, the ferry and point B give us 4 shots in each chapter and we have ourselves a nice little project of 12 shots. now that would be something huh? hahaha
cheers man
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by Francis Harrison [Furachan]
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